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    here's one

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    Just a maize field in the Waikato.

    I know it's a mediocre shot, but would like to know how to improve it if I had the chance to re-shoot it.

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    Noah

    First impression is that i'm not overly keen on it.

    The angle is interesting and it certainly is not your normal child portrait, but i'm not keen on the composition and the DoF. I like the use of colour, the baby blue PJ's convey the gender of the child. With reference to the composition, i feel a wider angle, with more negative space would work better, and with reference to the DoF, the very shallow DoF bores and frustrates me (in the way that so much modern shallow DoF based photography used by wedding photographers etc does), i would much rather see the child from head to toe.

    Interesting idea though.


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    Cheers

    I always felt it needed more space too.
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    Adam, I think an issue I have with this is that the orientation is wrong. What I'm drawn to do is look the same direction as noah but I can't and I'm left the space is to his left which is irrevelant to us. If you had shot as a portrait with the space where he was looking I think this would be a much stronger photo. I still like it though.

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    I like the shallow DOF. I agree a portrait orientation might be better, and I think it might have been better if the angle was a bit more from behind rather than almost straight on top. Maybe seeing more of the folded arms, maybe a bit of cheek.
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    taken in feb this year with el cheapo camera, not sure if i like it because it looks good or because it reminds me of the whitebait fritters i'd eaten just prior to taking this
    so anyways good or bad? or on the right track?
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    I'm stumped.
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    ahhh..ok, that sounds bad, so its definitely the whitebait fritters then lol?

    edit: actually the more photos i see on these forums the more average my efforts look, i think i need to put more time and thought into taking them cos after going through all the photos on my laptop they all just look like holiday snaps with no real thought.
    So perhaps just disregard that last photo...
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    Nah, I was just making a bad joke.

    I like the colour and side lighting. You've not placed it dead centre of the picture which is nice. You've noticed something most people wouldn't give a second glance, and made a good picture out of it, so I think you should be happy with it. And if you have some emotional attachment with it, all the better.

    The sky is plain and boring, so I guess if you could have got a higher perspective looking down on it and taken out some sky that might have been good. Or maybe a closer crop of the stump. Maybe an angle looking down the beach a little. Sometimes if you spend 10 minutes and try different angles you can hone in on a really good composition. Or sometimes there just isn't one.
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    I agree with Mike.

    It looks sharp enough and processed fine. The framing isnt the best but not the worst, sea and sky background is boring so woul dhave been better shot with a shallower DOF ( more subject isolation).

    I think a wider crop would work better. may also be worth trying a B&W version.
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    thanks for the comments, giving me more ideas how to improve

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    Default Auckland Street shot

    Shot this from car window with my 50mm f1.8 at traffic lights. (i was the passenger ) Decided to crop and black and white. I quite liked this shot . However is it interesting only to me because i was the photographer and is it just ok (or not even close to ok)Name:  Street copy-1 (1).jpg
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    I think crop works in this image. I would like to see little more contrast on B&W conversion. I see little more pop on main subject in colour version even it is not copped - thanks for shallow DOF. Nice picture. let's see how Master Paul see this. I'm very interesting to know how others look the two version.

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